one full year of deviantart experience for me.
thank you for being my friend.

thanx 4 the watch

Nice poetry. You should post more sometime.

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"Evans boldly put 50 atm of ethylene in a cell with 25 atm of oxygen. The apparatus subsequently blew up, but luckily not before he obtained the spectra shown in Figure 8." A. J. Merer and R. S. Mulliken, Chem. Rev. 69, 645 (1969)

just stopping by to say: THANK YOU FOR WATCHING ME and THANK YOU FOR BEING MY FRIEND (even in virtual world)

i like your stuff....must read more!!

welcome to DA! some nice poetry you have here, and i don't know much about poetry, but good job!

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"Todo es arte." - Marta Minujin

I think for starters i would recommend that you experiment more with rhyme scheme. I hate to come off as one of those anti-rhyming people but using a common rhyme scheme is an almost sure way to make your work seem cliche'. Out of the 3 works you have posted at the time of this comment two of them utilize an ABBA rhyme scheme and the other AABB. It's certainly a good way to get started writing poetry, so i'm not trying to discourage you but rather give you something that can help you create a goal. So maybe next time you feel you want to write about something, try putting it into a more unusual/unorthodox rhyme scheme...something that isn't so obvious and wont come off as being "cheesy" to the reader. Or perhaps try doing something free verse...or maybe do something in a form that is still traditional but doesn't use a rhyme scheme like blank verse (unrhymed iambic pentameter). Best of luck to you, I hope to see if you try any of this out in the future.

hi welcome to DA thanks for your comment.you have a great gallery started,keep up the good work

peace
~Charlie

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"I won't cry - I will go mad!" - Poe
"We can't stop here This is bat country!" -Fear & Loathing...

yep, my first poem and kind of messed up with the comments and poem...yea.